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Quoting the other doctor said all the amniotic fluid surrounding the baby in the womb is all gone; she could choke on the umbilical cord”.

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Bobbie tells Docroe Pierce what the other doctor said all the amniotic fluid surrounding the baby in the womb is all gone; she could choke on the umbilical cord".
asked Feb 23 '13 at 06:46 Sandra Brown New member

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Sandra,

 

Your question is very confusing because you have a slightly-different text in your question compared to the text after "See example".  I will respond only to the 2nd text.

 

First of all, is this a work of fiction?  If so, the present tense is okay; otherwise you should use past tense.

 

Second, is Docroe a typo for Doctor, or it actually a name?  Please doublecheck.

 

Here are my other corrections:

 

Bobbie tells Docroe Pierce what the other doctor said: the amniotic fluid surrounding the baby in the womb is all gone, so the baby could choke on the umbilical cord.

link comment answered Feb 23 '13 at 14:52 Shawn Mooney Expert

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