I keep being told by the grammar checker that this is a fragments sentence but I can't see why....
Nee pricked up his ears as the sphere went bouncing overhead, the sound now growing in intensity.
I'm no expert but would appreciate a little advice on what I am doing wrong and whether fragmented sentences are acceptable.
One problem is that you have three tenses descibing actions that happened at the same time. 'Pricked' is past tense, 'went bouncing' is past progressive (sort of), and 'growing' is present progressive. Change all of these to past tense, and make the dependent clause have a compound verb, and you will be fine.
Nee pricked up his ears as the sphere bounced overhead and the sound grew in intensity.
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