Is this sentence OK? Is "others" OK or should I use "other people" or "people"

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The temptation to compare our bank accounts, our appearance, our talents and our skills to other people is ever present.

asked Feb 13 '13 at 22:55 Susan New member

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Susan,

 

In Lewis's second answer, he has given you some great advice.  I would tighten it up (make it less wordy, as Lewis had originally suggested in his first answer), as well as correct other small errors, by rewording it this way: 

 

The temptation to compare our wealth, appearance, talents, and skills to those of others' is ever-present.

 

I hope this helps. 

link comment answered Feb 14 '13 at 12:45 Shawn Mooney Expert
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I'm sorry I misread you sentence, Susan. I just zeroed in on the wrong meaning. I thought this was a promotion line for a bank. Forget all that other stuff I wrote.

 

To compare to is to point out or imply resemblances between objects regarded as essentially of a different order; to compare with is mainly to point out differences between objects regarded as essentially of the same order.  I'm not sure which would be the best fit here, however. You can best decide that.

 

The things you are compare on one side are possessive: our bank accounts. The other side of the comparison is with people. 'Other people's' might work better, but I like 'other' either way.

 

The temptation to compare our bank accounts, our appearance, our talents, and our skills to other people's is ever present.

 

I hope this actually gives you some help rather than totally confusing both of us.

link answered Feb 14 '13 at 02:42 Lewis Neidhardt Grammarly Fellow

Lewis, this helped! Thank you!

SusanFeb 14 '13 at 03:29

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