“Absolutely, I want you to be my sister ─ that is if you wish,” Allen said and gave her another hug.
Why is the above wrong (my sister- that is if you)
Your sentence is basically okay (and Sanjay's advice was incorrect). But you definitely need a comma after that is, and I think a comma would also be a good idea after said, too. Or the final part of the sentence could be reworded this way: Allen said, before giving her another hug.
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