Comparing two or more things
I cannot figure out how to blend these two sentences. I keep getting "comparing two or more things" when I run the check. I have changed them several times to no avail.
The Oh Lola ad has the model’s hair styled to look like a little girls with straight, blonde hair. Love’s Baby Soft has styled their model’s hair to make her look older with large curls and highlights.
Love's Baby Soft has styled their model's hair to make her look older with large curls and highlights.
It is interesting to discover how one person can perceive something very differently than another person does. I looked up both of these products so I could have a little more context.
“Oh, Lola” is the name of a perfume. The name includes the comma. The blonde model in the ads is Dakota Fanning, who I no longer a little girl. In one ad, she is holding a large perfume bottle right at her crotch. In another, she is holding a small bottle right beside her cleavage. I don’t think having straight hair trumps the poses. She looks quite grown up to me.
Love’s Baby Soft currently has a Facebook page. All of the models in all of the pictures have long straight blonde hair. The fragrance has a history, from the 1970’s, of advertisements that tried to make the models look very young and even baby-like. The tagline was “Because innocence is sexier than you think.” (If a company tried something like that these days, they’d be accused of promoting child pornography.) Even though the models had grown-up hair styles, everything else about the pictures (holding a teddy bear or a lollipop) makes the model look very young.
I said all that, I guess, to explain why I can’t figure out how to help you put your sentences together. My search for more context just made the sentences make less sense to me.
|link comment||answered Feb 11 '13 at 01:07 Patty T Grammarly Fellow|
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