The preceeding sentences talk about plural diseases. I want the sentence in the example to be the ending thought for these statements but Grammarly sees this as pronoun disagreement within the single sentence structure. Here is the complete paragraph.
Women with PCOS, especially those who are struggling with weight gain or obesity, are at a higher risk for other more serious health related issues, such as type two diabetes due to the over-productive pancreas and increased insulin levels. In addition, it can lead to cardiovascular disease, high blood pressure, uterine cancer, sleep apnea, and depression. Early diagnosis and intervention is the key to preventing these life threatening diseases.
Early diagnosis and intervention is the key to preventing these life threatening diseases.
I don't see a pronoun in the example sentence. 'To preventing' sounds odd, though. 'To' indicates an infinitive coming up. I would change it to '...key to the prevention...'
I first saw 'Early diagnosis and intervention' as a compound subject, but since early diagnosis would not be beneficial without subsequent intervention, they can be taken as one unit. I'm surprised you didn't get a flag for subject/verb agreement.
|link comment||answered Feb 10 '13 at 17:08 Lewis Neidhardt Grammarly Fellow|
First of all, key to preventing is perfectly grammatical. To here is not an infinitive marker, it is a preposition; preventing is a gerund, and gerunds are the only grammatically acceptable verb form that can follow a preposition. There is no need to change the gerund to a noun, and such a change would be unnecessarily wordy, I think.
There should be a hyphen between life and threatening. (life-threatening). The same for health-related.
You need a comma after diabetes.
Using the with over-productive pancreas does not make sense to me here. an would be a slight improvement, but Google suggests the phrase pancreatic over-activity in this context.
The pronoun problem in your text is with it after In addition. It is unclear which singular or uncountable noun this pronoun refers to. I am pretty sure it is supposed to refer back to PCOS but the way you have structured this text, it grammatically fails to do so. If I am right about what you intended, use PCOS instead of it.
Women with PCOS, especially those who are struggling with weight gain or obesity, are at a higher risk for other more serious health-related issues, such as type two diabetes, due to pancreatic over-activity and increased insulin levels. In addition, PCOS can lead to cardiovascular disease, high blood pressure, uterine cancer, sleep apnea, and depression. Early diagnosis and intervention is the key to preventing these life-threatening diseases.
|link comment||answered Feb 11 '13 at 04:29 Shawn Mooney Expert|
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