sentence phrasing

"Everything around us seemed as if it were moving at light speed while my wife and I sat motionless."

I can not seem to get this wording correctly please help.

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Everything around us seemed as if it were moving at light speed, while my wife and i sat motionless.

asked Feb 05 at 22:22

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Try switching the phrasing aroun putting the people first. You need 'I' capitalized.

While my wife and I sat motionless, everything around us seemed as if it were moving at light speed.

A little different.

While my wife and I sat motionless, everything around us seemed to be moving at light speed.

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edited Feb 05 at 23:30

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