Born or Borne? Punctuation looks clumsy. What do you think?

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Borne of a desire to help local schools and clubs raise fundraising efforts, Show and Tell Photography really is all about community and creativity.  With over ten years local teaching experience, I would be delighted to help your organisation boost fundraising by coming in and unobtrusively taking candid portraits of the children doing what they do best - learning and playing.

Parents will be delighted to receive an affordable, timeless, personality-rich image of their child and your organisation reaps the benefit of proceeds raised, with very minimal outlay of time and effort.

asked Jan 21 '13 at 23:03 Wendy Leitch New member

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Wendy, we discussed born or borne last week, so I’m not sure why you are asking about it again.  Doing so makes it appear that our efforts to answer your previous question were ignored.  That doesn’t really motivate people to spend their time writing an answer.  We aren’t employees here.  This isn’t a free writing or editing service site.  I recommend your niece hire a marketing professional to help her with her start-up. 

 

There are a lot of things I would change in this passage.  In addition to my comments last week about raise fundraising, I will point out that unobtrusively taking candid portraits is a very messy phrase. Unobtrusively should be assumed if she is taking candid photos.  Portraits are usually a more formal photo, very different than candid shots. 

link answered Jan 22 '13 at 02:27 Patty T Grammarly Fellow

Apologies for repeating the question. I reposted it because someone from 'ask the community' indicated it would be good to see the word in it's full context. I sent it to the wrong section and it won't won't happen again.

Wendy LeitchFeb 08 '13 at 05:18

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