How to correct faulty parallelism in this sentence?

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For this reason, I plan to pursue a process that will enabel the Obstetrical unit to perform an adequate triage and decrease the waiting time, decrease left without being seen by 10% and decrease the number of days the OB unit goes on diversion.

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For this reason, I plan to pursue a process that will enable the Obstetrical unit to perform an adequate triage and decrease the waiting time, decrease left without being seen by 10% and decrease the number of days the OB unit goes on diversion.
asked May 31 '11 at 23:44 Diana Christian New member

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There isn't a problem with parallellism here; your verbs "perform," "decrease" and "decrease" all agree in tense. I think the checker got confused because it didn't realise "being" was part of the compound object "left without being seen." For that matter, neither did I, on the first read-through. It seems that your readers will be familiar with the phrase, but I would still place "left without being seen" in quotation marks to make it clear that it's all one object that will be decreased.

 

You also misspelled "enable." You should remove the "the" in front of "waiting time," and put a comma after "10%." :)

link comment answered Jun 01 '11 at 19:38 Collane Ramsey Expert

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