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Tom walked through a swamp that was so thick that when it was noon it would be still be very dark.
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Thick shouldn't describe the swamp; a swamp is "a tract of wet, spongy land, often having a growth of certain types of trees and other vegetation, but unfit for cultivation" (Dictionary.com) and thick would only correctly describe the trees and vegetation. As well, this sentence could be tightened up by eliminating the need for two thats:
Tom walked through a swamp so thick with trees that daylight could not penetrate it.
-that daylight could barely penetrate it is less extreme, and perhaps a more accurate statement.
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