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Tom walked through a swamp that was so thick that when it was noon it would be still be very dark.
asked Jan 20 '13 at 01:00 Jorge López New member

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Huh?

 

Do you have a question here?

 

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link comment answered Jan 20 '13 at 02:47 Tony Proano Expert
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this is part a free women makes no sense, but I assume you want comments on the example sentence?

 

Thick shouldn't describe the swamp; a swamp is "a tract of wet, spongy land, often having a growth of certain types of trees and other vegetation, but unfit for cultivation" (Dictionary.com) and thick would only correctly describe the trees and vegetation.  As well, this sentence could be tightened up by eliminating the need for two thats:

 

Tom walked through a swamp so thick with trees that daylight could not penetrate it.

 

-that daylight could barely penetrate it is less extreme, and perhaps a more accurate statement.

link comment answered Jan 20 '13 at 02:49 Shawn Mooney Expert

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