Usage of infinitives
1. “It is our contention that a deterministic model in conjunction with a stochastic model, in the higher hierarchy, seems to be a more practical solution approach, and may be better to secure short-term benefits than a stochastic model alone in the presence of uncertain future inflows.”
2. It is our contention that a deterministic model in conjunction with a stochastic model, in the higher hierarchy, seems to be a more practical solution approach, and may be better secure short-term benefits than a stochastic model alone in the presence of uncertain future inflows.
3. It is our contention that a deterministic model in conjunction with a stochastic model, in the higher hierarchy, seems to be a more practical solution approach, and may be better in securing short-term benefits than a stochastic model alone in the presence of uncertain future inflows.
Dear, For the 1st sentence Grammarly recommended me to use the 2nd sentence. Is this suggestion right? What about using the 3rd sentence instead?
Sheung Kim
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I would go with:
It is our contention that a deterministic model in conjunction with a stochastic model, in the upper hierarchy, seems to be a more practical approach and may secure better short-term benefits than a stochastic model alone in the presence of uncertain future inflows.
- Change "higher" to "upper" - easier to read because of the change in sounds
- Remove "solution" - redundant
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Move "better". Techincally the following are all correct:
x may be better to secure results than y
x may better secure results than y
x may be better in securing results than y
but
x may secure better results than y is least likely to cause confusion and keeps it less 'wordy'.
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answered May 31 '11 at 15:20
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