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why people called him is a historian because he founded The International Museum and Library of the Conjuring Arts, it's the world's largest collection of historical museums and libraries of magic memorabilia, posters, books, props and artifacts.
asked Jan 17 '13 at 07:26 tom New member

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The correct relative clause at the beginning of your sentence would be Why people called him a historian and the grammar term for this kind of clause is a WH-cleft.  WH-clefts are unusual, and I do not know the larger context of your text, but it would only be appropriate if there was some surprise or debate about his being called a historian.  For example, if he was known as a full-time professional magician, but he founded the museum on the side, then the WH-cleft might be logical if it followed a sentence like "He was known the world over for being a professional magician but, in fact, many of his colleagues also called him a historian".  Here are my corrections, including correcting the comma splice:

 

Why people called him a historian was because he founded the International Museum and Library of the Conjuring Arts, the world's largest collection of magic memorabilia, posters, books, props, and artifacts.

 

However, I think the WH-cleft is needlessly wordy and the following is more concise, and thus better:

 

He was called a historian because he founded the International Museum and Library of the Conjuring Arts, the world's largest collection of magic memorabilia, posters, books, props, and artifacts.

 

Please look up historian in your dictionary and compare it to curator and archivistHistorian usually describes someone who does primary historical research and writes books about history; amateur historian is used more colloquially to describe someone who takes a serious interest in history and does things like found museums or libraries so maybe it would be the best term. Or perhaps curator or archivist would be more precise.

 

One last comment:  known as is more formal than called; depending on the context of your text, you might consider that revision as well.

 

I hope this helps.

link comment edited Jan 18 '13 at 12:47 Shawn Mooney Expert

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