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I am having difficulty with passive and active voice in writing.

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When treating patients with chronic illness, it is more likely that the care will be provided by different health care providers and at different locations and having access to the patients's record is crucial in order to provide proper care.
asked Jan 11 '13 at 21:20 Lenora Durr New member

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Here's a Q&A about passive voice:

http://www.grammarly.com/answers/questions/9338-whats-wrong-with-the-passive-voice/

 

Additionally, for this sentence, I would break it into two sentences.  The first "and" joins a list of two items.  Following that immediately with another "and" makes it seem like you are going to list a third item that is "more likely."  Instead, you start a new thought. 

 

... at different locations.  Convenient (easy/fast) access to ...

link comment answered Jan 11 '13 at 22:01 Patty T Grammarly Fellow

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