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Please let me know if this sentence is written correctly? Thank you.

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One difficult situation in which I remembered that at first seems difficult for me to accept was the transition of my career life and moving back home with my parents.
asked Jan 09 '13 at 22:43 Hope New member

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I would revise that sentence slightly; it's a bit confusing. Here's what I would do:

 

One difficult situation I remember, which at first was difficult for me to accept, was the transition of my career life and the subsequent move back home with my parents.

link answered Jan 09 '13 at 22:55 Michelle Webb New member

Thank you for your help. Hope

HopeJan 10 '13 at 01:25

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This is a very wordy sentence, which creates a lack of clarity.  Was the situation difficult, or was finding acceptance difficult, or maybe it only seemed difficult because you aren’t certain of what you remember?  Was it difficult to accept the transition of your career, or the moving back home, or both?

 

Using the past tense of remember means that you remembered it in the past, you no longer remember it.  You can actually drop the mention that you remember it.  Unless you made great efforts to remember, such as being hypnotized, the reader can surmise that you remember the event being mentioned. 

 

The transition of my career life led to the difficult situation of moving back home with my parents.  

link answered Jan 10 '13 at 00:20 Patty T Grammarly Fellow

Thank you for your help. Hope

HopeJan 10 '13 at 01:29

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