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The idea behind my integrated lesson plan for Health and Physical Education is to focus on the effects Cyber Bullying can have on students and the wider community and the students Information Communication and Technology skills.
asked May 23 '11 at 11:51 Dianne Rowley New member

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"The idea behind my integrated lesson plan for Health and Physical Education is to focus both on the students' Information Communication and Technology skills and on the effects that cyber-bullying can have on students and the wider community."

 

Because "students and the wider community" is a compound object, its and gets tangled up with the and that links the two objectives of your lesson plan. For this reason, move it to the end. There is also an and in "Information Communication and Technology skills", but it's more obvious that this is one thing because of the capitals. You could also shorten it to "ICT skills" for clarity if you think your audience will already know the acronym. However, if you leave "Information Communication and Technology skills" in its long form, then there are still a lot of ands floating around. Use both to signal to the reader that there are two objectives coming up, and use the preposition on to signal the beginning of each phrase.

link comment answered May 23 '11 at 16:58 Collane Ramsey Expert

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